Katy Perry & Russell Brand’s wedding.
Gate Crashing Tiger!!!
At the wedding of Russell Brand and Katy Perry the unbelievable happened. A room filled with 85 guests of the newlywed’s families and friends all was okay. But on the other side of the ceremony a man eating tiger attracted to the bright lights and loud noises of the wedding started to jump over walls to get closer to the attraction. Finally before the tiger could get any closer to the newly wed and their party guest, the guards chased the tiger away making sure he never came back. So in the end everything went back to normal and no one was hurt. Thank God!
Victoria, great start. You have taken the key information and chosen an interesting aspect of the story to communicate to the audience
ReplyDeleteTo make this even better, you should also read this article to see if it makes sense. It might be worth getting a friend to read. Can they follow all of it?
Take a look at this sentence: A room filled with 85 guests of the newlywed's families and friends all was okay.
This could be rewritten. Something like this:
The room was filled with 85 guests of the newlyweds. They were friends and family of the couple and they were all enjoying themselves. Then….."
Mr Monahan