EXT.WALKING TO THE CAB OFFICE
CAB OFFICE MAN:
Yes Ma’ma may I help you
TORI:
TORI:
Yes may I have a cab to drop me and my friend to a party on Philly Street?
CAB OFFICE MAN:
Yes, the cab would be here soon
SHAY:
Thank you.
(The girls wait outside for the cab until it came.)
CAB:
(BEEP BEEP)
SHAY:
Hey tor I think the cab is here
TORI:
Yeah man, let’s go to party
(Once in the cab the girls didn’t hear what the office man was saying)
CAB OFFICE MAN:
HEY WERE YOU GOING THAT IS THE WRONG CAB!!!
(But it was too late the girls were gone)
INT.CAB
As the cab man was driving he missed the street that the girls were suppose to get off at
TORI:
Ummm... excuse me do you know where we’re going?
CAB MAN:
(Says nothing)
SHAY:
HELLO! Can’t you hear her talking to you?
CAB MAN:
(Looks in the mirror at them and then the doors suddenly lock)
TORI:
(Laughs nervously) the doors are locked, could you unlock them please?
SHAY:
Tori I don’t like the look of things
TORI:
Me neither
(The cab man closed the window separating him from listening to the girls)
SHAY:
HEY! WHAT DO YOU THINK YOU’RE DOING!!
(Cloudy smoke fills the back of the cab)
TORI:
Hey I can’t breathe the smoke is chocking me
SHAY:
Open the windows, I can breathe
The girls pass out and get dropped in an abandoned warehouse were they meet to other girls.
TORI:
(Wakes up groggy) where are we
SHAY:
I don’t know but I can tell u one thing
TORI:
What?
SHAY:
We missed the MINDLESS BEHAVIOR CONCERT, all my money wasted for your stupid birthday and guess what we get kidnapped!
TORI:
Shay, please just shut up
SHAY:
What ever...
SHAY sees a figure moving
SHAY:
Tori can you see that
TORI:
See what??
SHAY:
That! (Points to the 2 figures)
The figure walks towards the girls
Figure1:
Hello?
SHAY:
Umm hi who are you
Figure 2
(steps into the light with figure 1)
TORI:
Wait your Ray Ray from MB
SHAY:
And your prodigy, wait what are you two doing here
Prodigy:
It’s not only us
(2 more boys step out of the shadows)
TORI:
Princeton and Roc Royal, how did you get here?
PRINCETON:
We got kidnapped to.
ROC ROYAL:
It happened so quickly
SHAY:
Do you know what’s going to happen to us
Prodigy:
Sadly, no
The cab man steps in to the area with a bloody knife in his hand.
CAB MAN:
Whose first (Evil smile).....
Victoria
ReplyDeleteGreat script. You have used the correct formatting. You have used the right indents to show the difference between the action and the dialogue. All character names have been written in capitals and there are directions for the characters in brackets.
To make this even better, just make sure you describe the action that we see. For example "she sees a shadowy figure" could be rewritten as what the audience sees on screen, so for example "a man with a hoodie cowers in the shadows by the wall and walks slowly towards her." That way we really get an idea of what is happening on screen, In this situation we leave nothing to the imagination of the reader!
Distinction
Mr Monahan